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很多同學在參加完6月18日的雅思考試之后都感覺自己的大作文寫得不太理想。今天我們就來看一下留學監(jiān)理網(wǎng)老師的深度解析,希望可以幫你指點迷津。
Some people think schools should teach students to form good behavior in addition to providing formal education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
本次考試的題目屬于教育類范疇,看到題目之后,大部分的學生都會選擇同意題干中的觀點也就是學校除了進行正常的教學之外,還要教給學生良好的行為舉止。
對于大部分學生來說,本文最大的難點在于尋找例證。接下來我們就來寫一個提綱,中間加入我們需要的例證:
第一段:開頭--agree
第二段:good behavior對personal development也很重要
例證:面試的時候要dress well,要professional
第三段:good behavior對我們很重要,是成為qualified citizen的必要條件,做人要polite,要respect他人
例證:歐洲杯賽場上的football hooligans
第四段:總結(jié)--conclusion
接下來我們看一下留學監(jiān)理網(wǎng)老師的范文:
Sample Response
In recent years, there has been a heated discussion about the role school plays in children’s education. Now there is a growing number of people declaring that schools should teach their pupils to conduct themselves and make them know virtues of humanity. Personally, I am in much favor of this claim and I will discuss it in my essay.
To begin with, good behavior can help with your personal development. People with good behavior know how to dress and talk in different occasions, which will make them easier to be successful. One of my friends is an HR manager who interviews people. He told me that good behavior is very important for the interviewees, because good behavior makes people look professional and professionalism is what companies value very much. Someone who is sloppy or unpolite is not trustworthy and unlikely to be employed.
What's more, having good behavior is the foundation of being a qualified citizen in our society nowadays. A person with good behavior is always polite, modest and respect others and abide by the laws and moral principals. European Cup is such a great sports game and attracts many football fans and match viewers from around the world. However, the wonderful games are not the only focus; the football hooligans drew people’s attention by their great “deed” in France. They have fought on the streets, destroyed several cafes and bars and even caused injuries of many innocent people. If those football hooligans had been educated well and been given a lesson about how to have good behavior, they wouldn’t have been so violent..
Clearly, good behavior has many impact in our lives which will affect our first impression and integrity. As a consequence, schools should pay more attention to students’ behavior and teach them to form good behavior in addition to providing formal education.
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